The Writers' Thread

**ScreamingEvil** · Joined: 13 Sep 2007 Posts: 726 Location: Leeds, UK

I've been writting lyrics for about 3-4 years now, mostly for fun, or when I get random inspiration. I have random scraps and notebooks of them. I've never really gone beyond that though, I'm not that great at writting music (although I haven't been trying long) so I mostly stick to the lyrics. I have contributed lyrics to some of my friend's works however.

I don't think I've actually put together a full song's worth of stuff before. Mostly I jot down the odd verse or chorus or so and leave it. However since I'm aiming to try and go professional with it, I'll probably post some of my stuff up here sooner or later for some critic.
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**Yewb** · Joined: 10 Jan 2008 Posts: 3020 Location: Plymouth, UK

I do write lyrics on occasion, not as much as I'd like to. Most of my stuff is boring and repetitive, in my opinion - I tend not to take my friends' opinions on it, because they're always going to say it's good even if it's the hugest pile of ass in the world.

That said, here's a short piece I wrote a couple months ago. I'm only posting this one because the rest of my stuff isn't as concise or literal (I'm one of those annoying lyricists who veils everything in deliberately-incomplete metaphors). It's a pretty whiny song, but it was intentionally written that way. There's some abysmal rhyming here, too.

**mdizzy** · Posted: Fri Mar 26, 2010 3:37 pm Post subject:

**Yewb** · Joined: 10 Jan 2008 Posts: 3020 Location: Plymouth, UK

Thanks, dude - that really means a lot

Praise from another lyricist is high praise indeed, in my books at least.

I like the lyrics you posted earlier, too; it's a new take on an old idea, which I love because it's one of the hardest styles to write in (in my opinion).

I think I'm going to write today: I've got a song I have high hopes for but haven't finished yet, so I might get that one finished this afternoon.

Edit: Yep, finished the first draft of "Think" - the verses are awful, but the chorus is alright I think. Need to go back and redo the first two verses - there's nothing really to them at the moment. I'll post it here when I'm done for the day.
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expertwin wrote:

ShadoWolf wrote:

expertwin wrote:

I just want to, you know, get my name out there. BTW, it updates every Thursday, Friday, and Saturday. Was just the first two, decided to do Saturdays as well.

Serious advice now: No-one likes indecision in their work, so find what you like that you're even remotely good at, and stick with it. Don't flit from one thing to another, because that just smacks of a large lack of determination and drive. And people don't like you for that, and won't remember you for it. I mean, I get that you have a plucky spirit and a willingness to try new things, but there's a limit, man.

I might knock it down to just Thursday and Friday.

JOE2210 wrote:

Leave me alone, I have been drinking and your made up words mean nothing to me.

**OpenYourEyes** · Posted: Sat Mar 27, 2010 11:08 pm Post subject:

I like the song itself, Yewb, but the writing format is one my least favorites. It's just the rhyming scheme that you used. aaaabbbb isn't a very good one, in my opinion.

Don't think I'm saying that the song is bad, though. The song is very good.
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Eastwinn wrote:

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**Yewb** · Joined: 10 Jan 2008 Posts: 3020 Location: Plymouth, UK

**OpenYourEyes** · Posted: Thu Apr 01, 2010 1:22 am Post subject:

I love toying with rhyming schemes and stanza patterns. I wrote a poem for an English assignment a few weeks ago. I tried to post just the rhyming scheme, but it's really confusing, and I didn't feel like working it out, so I'm just going to post it.

**mdizzy** · Posted: Sun Apr 11, 2010 6:19 am Post subject:

The seventh song from my forthcoming metal album "Death Penalty", which you can listen to the first 2 tracks in my sig. This song will probably be the most unusual as it features a slower beat with a piano and in the chorus a music box, a sort of experimental-type metal song.

Title: Superficial Existence
Artist: Micah Devereaux
Album: Death Penalty

"Verse 1: You reap what you sow/you pay what you owe//The
tendencies of man/lie in your heart(you're never finished/as long
as you never start)

Chorus: You've bled me of all I've got to give/you suck me dry
and then make you're exit/I see her leave it all behind/is there
nothing I can do but watch her slowly die//you chain yourself to
superficial existence/you aimlessly stagger with defiant
persistence/I see her leave it all behind/I turn away as she
slowly dies//

Verse 2: You can't stay if you go/you leave too fast and return
too slow//The trepidations of a woman/pierces through my
heart(Either never come back/or never depart)

Chorus: You've bled me of all I've got to give/you suck me dry
and then make you're exit/I see her leave it all behind/is there
nothing I can do but watch her slowly die//you chain yourself to
superficial existence/you aimlessly stagger with defiant
persistence/I see her leave it all behind/I turn away as she
slowly dies//"
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**dragoninforcer** · Joined: 10 Dec 2007 Posts: 1457 Location: Long Island

Where's Subrick when you need him?

**Yewb** · Joined: 10 Jan 2008 Posts: 3020 Location: Plymouth, UK

**OpenYourEyes** · Posted: Tue Apr 20, 2010 5:00 am Post subject:

I love that song. The words flow perfectly, and the concept is amazing. Great work, Yewb.

Also, who is the person in your avatar?
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blingdomepiece wrote:

Eastwinn wrote:

As a kid I wasted my time cheating in SimCity or the Sims, and now that I'm discovering how much fun it is to not cheat, I'm also discovering how stupidly hard it is

Set all the tax rates to 9.

**RichardGHP** · Joined: 01 May 2009 Posts: 2327

**Yewb** · Joined: 10 Jan 2008 Posts: 3020 Location: Plymouth, UK

Thank you both!

RichardGHP - yeah, I know about the lack of a chorus, and you're right about it as well - I keep meaning to rewrite it and put a chorus in, but I never really get round to it. I think I might actually do that today

Thanks for your encouragement and CC, though - it really means a lot to me to know that people don't think my work is as bad as I do lol. And yeah, my lack of ability to structure a song is something that's always kind of pissed me off - I need to learn to use tempo changes and breaks much more often and effectively

OpenYourEyes - Thank you very much! The guy in my avatar is me, incidentally

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expertwin wrote:

ShadoWolf wrote:

expertwin wrote:

I just want to, you know, get my name out there. BTW, it updates every Thursday, Friday, and Saturday. Was just the first two, decided to do Saturdays as well.

Serious advice now: No-one likes indecision in their work, so find what you like that you're even remotely good at, and stick with it. Don't flit from one thing to another, because that just smacks of a large lack of determination and drive. And people don't like you for that, and won't remember you for it. I mean, I get that you have a plucky spirit and a willingness to try new things, but there's a limit, man.

I might knock it down to just Thursday and Friday.

JOE2210 wrote:

Leave me alone, I have been drinking and your made up words mean nothing to me.

**OpenYourEyes** · Posted: Wed Apr 21, 2010 4:31 am Post subject:

Richard: Thank you! The songs will be heavy balads, of that makes sense. They'll be acoustic guitar and sceams, because I love the sound of high pitched screams. EDIT: Well, actually, only A Chainless Prison and My Mind is Glowing are sceamed. The other two are sung normally.

Yewb: We look so similar that there were a couple of times I thought that was me.

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blingdomepiece wrote:

Eastwinn wrote:

As a kid I wasted my time cheating in SimCity or the Sims, and now that I'm discovering how much fun it is to not cheat, I'm also discovering how stupidly hard it is

Set all the tax rates to 9.

**mdizzy** · Posted: Thu Apr 22, 2010 1:26 am Post subject:

My latest offering, please enjoy!

Title: Mutiny
Artist: Micah Devereaux
Album: Death Penalty